Title: Martial Law
Author: Le Moi (Sylver135)
Tags: Action, Adventure, Comedy, Harem, Fantasy, Martial Arts, Reincarnation, Romance
Synopsis:Regret is for the weak. It is for those that were unable to believe in their choices, for those that fell down on their path and were unable to get up. He has never regretted. He has cried in sadness, thrashed out in anger, fought for vengeance, but never regretted. Not 100 year ago, not 100 years later, not today. Waking up in this familiar but alien world that no longer needed him, what will he do? Will his awakening signal the dawn of a new age, or the return of old memories? Looking at himself, his first thoughts were, “Can someone please get me a diaper first.”
So uh, yeah my own little fiction story. Ignore the cheesy, crappy quality cover art. Ignore the novel as a whole even if you want. But for anyone who does read it, I would really appreciate some constructive criticism and honest commentary. This is my first time writing a story so… yeah, hope you guys enjoy.
ToC:
Prologue: The End
Chapter 1: The Beginning
Chapter 2: Awakening
Sylver Translations 
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Iíd need to check with you here. Which isnít some thing Itís my job to do! I like reading an article that will get people to feel. Also, appreciate your permitting me to comment!
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Please can you update at least 2 or 3 chapters the waiting is killing me. The story seems very interesting with lots of comedy and action though I don’t know about harem.
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Haven’t started yet but it looks promising
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When the next release gonna come ? Or is it dropped only after 2 chapters it’s been almost a month already.
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I plan on thoroughly thinking things through and getting some chapters down before posting again. When that is I don’t know, but it’ll be quite some time.
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In my opinon it is ok for just starting off, but i would shorten up each paragraph in order to give the reader a since of efficiently getting the information. Your painting a noce picture with your detailed descriptions, but it seems a bit too much. Most of your paragraphs were just fluff. Meaning it just made your entry longer without giving any relovent information. I do like were your going with the story and I like stories of the same theme, so I will be patiently waiting for more releases. I am a huge supporter of nooby writers. You can not succeed, without for putting for some effort!
Thanks for the novel as long as you write I will read it!
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Thanks for the feedback, I shall take note. I’m not going to post for a while and think about the plot so that the chapters are less fluffy. Mainly I sort of didn’t know what to write because I just started writing this on a whim with just the most basic idea.
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show your personalty imagine the world beyond the horizon for sylver and gold await you. (just think of weird stuff that is funny cool and interesting)
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I liked the first chapter. more please
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Le Moi what a good French name XD. Jokes aside good going on writing your own fictional story however I am not going to read it because I know It will be 100% rubbish, my Otaku powers says so. May the force be with you on you’re journey of writing.
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You may be right. I’d probably categorize my novel under YY, if you understand what that means. I don’t think I have enough depth in me to write a full on novel that would inspire deep thoughts and meaningful… stuff.
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Hmm I still encourage you to write more chapters of this novel and use this as a stepping stone to develop yourself as a writer. No need to inspire deep thoughts and meaningful stuff just do what you think sounds good and basically hope that some readers will like it. Good luck.
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im cainda writing a story but i always find it that you want to change something so think it through then write and belief me it helps 🙂
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